United States is having a rough time right now. I’m having a hard time writing–things don’t flow. Sometimes I feel good about our state — a change had to be– but other times I’m horrified. Here’s me trying to write….
Final Draft…..
Fog in the night
obscures
climb aboard
trust the sun
daylight soon
Genie Nakano 1 . 9 . 21
first draft… Pathways on the trains tracks fog in the air mystery ahead things getting better
second draft: pathways emerge I can’t see fog in the air new pathways emerge
third draft: fog in the air heat rises –fog is lifting we can get there clickety clack forage ahead
Which one do you prefer??? Why??? Thanking you in advance for responding.
Over and over searching seeking not sure if there is an answer to a lost poem All my gods are falling down dust is blowing everywhere the sun is burning gas Time drips by one after the other forgetting what day or night it is when does eternity end Just as hope was budding a zombie plague transformed into an “other” No/ this can’t be true if fake news is a truth make this all unreal
Renku a traditional form of Japanese poetry of linked verse composed of the collaboration of 2 or more poets. Each participant displays his wit by spontaneously composing of a verse in response to the verse that came before. Wikepidia
Organized by David Lanoue professor of English Literature at Zavier University of Louisiana
barren branches reach for the sky – clouds open /Genie
“What Child is This” from the trumpet next door /Nicholas
asleep on the doormat the puppy moves paws as if swimming /Veni
the mail is late again in New Orleans /Juliet
one month rings two moons over the glistening river /Nancy
the diamond engagement ring hidden in a walnut /David
restless again you decide to leave in autumn wind
first mother-daughter trip to the OB-GYN /Nicholus
on the screen of memory my oldest pencil drawing/Veni
Trump loses the election for the thirteenth time /Jennifer
through the vacation the curing sun empties Zoom classes /Nancy
a chili cheese hotdog beneath a hungry ghost moon /David
in a paper bag I carry shochu to the library /Genie
an inscription on the title page below the lipstick kiss /Nicolous
blind date again he recalls every lesson waiting in the dark /Veni
a dream of a Beatles song woven into my mind /Jennifer
good exchanges without masks futures to imagine /Nancy
looking in the mirror spring is here /Genie
the budding photographer ask the blossoms to smile /Nicolous
waking bees make a second crown for the plum tree /David
“Renku or rengu is a traditional Japanese poetry form of linked verse composed of the collaboration of 2 or more poets. Each participant displays his wit by spontaneously composing a verse in response to the verse that came before”. Wikipedia
This renku was organized and moderated by Professor of English at Xavier University of Louisiana, David Lanoue. David was the the President of the Haiku Society of America 2013 – 2015. He is a writer of Haiku and Haiku novels. He maintains the Haiku Kobayashi Issa website where he has translated 10,000 of Issa’s haiku.
October 3, 2020
Ginkgo leaves fluttering gold alchemy is real Genie
the dog barks at the moon in another time zone Nicholas
Autumn frost at dawn climbing slowly the window pain Veni
