Fog~~Revised

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United States is having a rough time right now. I’m having a hard time writing–things don’t flow. Sometimes I feel good about our state — a change had to be– but other times I’m horrified. Here’s me trying to write….

Final Draft…..

Fog in the night

obscures

climb aboard

trust the sun

daylight soon

Genie Nakano
1 . 9 . 21

first draft…
Pathways
on the trains tracks
fog in the air
mystery ahead
things getting better

second draft:
pathways
emerge
I can’t see
fog in the air
new pathways emerge

third draft:
fog in the air
heat rises –fog is lifting
we can get there
clickety clack
forage ahead

Which one do you prefer??? Why??? Thanking you in advance for responding.

Published by genienakano

I love writing--It's my joy, my therapy--my confession. I'm a performer, dancer, yoga and meditation instructor, write a poetry column for Rafu Shimpo. Growth and love of life is a key to my happiness.

6 thoughts on “Fog~~Revised

  1. My pleasure. I think people will appreciate your process.
    I understand. This situation impacts the world. Trump will continue to cause dissent within the country long after he leaves office.
    This does nothing for Biden’s image and authority if not handled swiftly.

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  2. That’s a great idea but I deleted it. From now on will save the process. Thanks Mouse for your suggestions. All the turmoil in Washington DC has me frozen. I keep looking at the news on my computer. It’s a nightmare. I wish Trump would step-down now. There is so much hate being projected. It’s dividing our country.

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